An Embarrassing Experience -----Draft one
One day, I went to department store and I took the elevator to somewhere. When the elevator stopped on certain storey, a good-looking girl entered in. Presently a kind of smell came out and it was very foul. When everyone stormed who farted , the girl suddently said " it isn't what I do." no one understood why she had such courage to admit that. If she hadn' t said that, no one would have known who do it . but she did. It's very embarrassing.
posted by 林小雞 @ 7:22 AM
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department store 要加冠詞
a department store or department stores
suddently ? suddenly
said,逗號 " it isn't what I do."
no one would have known who did it .
.But she did.
It was very embarrassing.
好像沒什麼問題
真笨 此地無銀三百兩...
應該沒問題吧!!
"I went to department store" before department store should plus 'a';you should notice your spelling(suddently?)
"I went to department store" department store 前面要加上"a" or "the"
先在Woed打文章再貼上比較容易發現錯字
a good-looking girl entered in enter可當不及物動詞，應該不用加in吧
冠詞及標點符號要注意喔!
大概就 冠詞 和 標點符號 …
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