My Bedroom----Draft one
I share the room with my sister, it's a little bit small for us, but every thing is complete. As you enter the door, you can see a double bed on the wall on the right. Next to the dresser and a chair. The left wall has my whole family's photoes. In the center of the room, there is a table above the rug, therefore I enjoy sitting on the floor and see the beautiful view through the big window for relax. It's warm and comfortable for me. There is full of my memories.
posted by 林小雞 @ 7:30 PM
7 Comments:
"The left wall has my whole family's photoes."should correct to "My whole family's photoes is hanged on the left wall." One more is "for relax"should be"to relax."
結論句用there is開頭有點怪
My bedroom is full of ...
雖然有重複到字
但是我覺得比較好懂一點
you can see a double bed on the wall on the right. Next to the dresser and a chair.
我建議你這樣改
you can see a double bed is on the right side of the wall,and it is next to the dresser and a chair
There is full of my memories.
我會用It is full of my memories.
"to relax" is better..
be full of =be filled with
＂Next to the dresser and a chair.＂
這句好像有點表達不清楚。
"photoes"要改成"photos"才對.
大家都說的差不多了!
應該沒問題了
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