Making Decision----Draft one
Making Decisions
To Grow up means making my own decisions. In law, eighteen-year-old which means to become adult. We should independent on the age because parents are no long to supply you anymore. Therefore, I have to learn making decisions by myself.The hardest decision that I ever made was to choose which university I want to study.
“University” means my own future and the mark I will be. There, I will learn professional knowledge and some practical skills that I need in my future work. Besides, it has an influence on my career as well as the quality of my life. Without a doubt, I must make great efforts so that I can have more choices. In conclusion, what I can do is try my best.
posted by 林小雞 @ 8:27 PM
5 Comments:
"... to become adult."should be"...an adult"
Your subjects of the paragraph 1 seem a little confused.
You are still in senior high,so you wrote "The hardest decision that I ever made was to choose which university I want to study."should be wrong.
In law, eighteen-year-old which means to become adult
應該要加個冠詞
We should be indepentdent on..
no longer 那句怪怪的
There, I will learn professional knowledge and some practical skills that I need in my future work
我會建議
將there 擺句尾
要不然會搞錯意思
第二句像DB說的一樣全離題
第二段要改恩
All you have to do is try your best.
In law, eighteen-year-old which means to become adult.
要加冠詞"an"
還有which可以不要加
should要+be
no longer跟anymore選一個就好了
第二段離題了
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