A Dream I Had
I had ever dreamed variety of dreams. Some of them were wonderful, the others were terrible. One day I dreamed that I got up late in certain morning, hoping time could pause. Amazingly, it indeed happened to me. I couldn't believe that I had a power which could make time break. Later, I counted on my power whenever I wanted. Consequently, the magical power was out of my control. When I wanted it passed quickly to skip disgusting exam, it just paused there, vise versa. Finally, my time was uncontrollable until I swallowed the last breath. Then I awoke frighteningly. It was awful dream. But the dream reminded me to grasp time as possible as I can. The best present for myself is the present.
posted by 林小雞 @ 8:02 AM
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I got up late in certain morning,
→ in a certain morning
It was awful dream.
→ a awful dream.
It was awful dream
It was an awful..
恩~我絕得有一點亂
in certain morning
in a certain morning
再多寫一些吧
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"I had ever dreamed variety of dreams. Some of them were wonderful, the others were terrible."these are describing a fact so if I were you, I would use "I have ever dreamed...Some of them are wonderful..."
"When I wanted it passed quickly to skip disgusting exam, it just paused ..."shuld be "When I wanted it passing quickly..."
The other mistakes are the same with big one.
"I had ever dreamed..."
ever 好像較常用於否定 有點怪怪的
I had ever dreamed variety of dreams.
you can use "have"
your dream is so cool
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